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11/05/2012

Literacy story begining

Filed under: - ARCHIVE 2011-12 — @ 13:42

The ground shook and the sky became black.  Lousie took one look and quikly scampred in a bush. The volcano was erupiting. Smoke corverd the tree tops and the trees began to fall. Soon all the land was corved with mist and lava was spitting everywhere.  Lousie dashed to a log but the lava forced her off. 

As the lava selttled, Lousie found her self in a waste land. Thirsty and hungry, she scrambled for surviel.

 



5 Comments »

  1. Wow this is really good .The first sentence made us want to read on. We loved how you described it very imaginatively. Well done Mia. We will probably do a post like that on our blog .We can’t wait to see your comments.
    Connor and Codie

      Connor and Codie — 15/05/2012 @ 12:27

  2. thanks for the comment i will be looking at your blog now.

      Mia — 18/05/2012 @ 13:11

  3. Wow this is really good .The first sentence made us want to read on. We loved how you described it very imaginatively. Well done Mia. We will probably do a post like that on our blog .We can’t wait to see your comments.
    Connor and Codie ( Lingwood Primary )

      Connor and Codie — 15/05/2012 @ 12:28

  4. Wow – fantastic story opening Mia. You really absorbed me into the story. I felt like I could visualise everything that you described.
    Well done.

      Mr Campbell — 15/05/2012 @ 21:49

  5. TERIFFIC!!! mia i would loved to read more

      Lauren — 18/05/2012 @ 13:14

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